A common face of the new millennium is Osama Bin Laden’s His face has been associated with a rising global crisis, terrorism. Terrorism is basically creating fear to establish an ideological goal through the targeting of innocent people.
Maulana Fazllulah is a pro-taliban cleric who uses his influence to convince people that the only way for them to achieve their goals is to use terrorism. He is supposedly behind the numerous bombings in the Pakistani region. In
Terrorism has become a worldwide problem. More and more groups result to this form of “negotiations” because most of the time they work. They achieve the goal of global panic. They give people a reason to be constantly in fear even in times when they should not. Just one attack can be enough to trigger months and months of panic among citizens. Governments are forced to spend millions, in other countries even billions, to try and answer the problem. Prices of some commodities go up, making the effects go beyond physical and psychological damages.
Ultimately, the person that gets affected the most is the ordinary citizen. They are the targets of the bombs and they are also affected the most by the aftershocks of such attacks.
17 comments:
The definition of terrorism was good. But it lacks content. You should have written more about some solutions that was undertaken by the government. And also some solutions that you think will solve terrorism.
the content is good. expound a little on your introduction, and write more solution. :)
i prefer this kind of paragraph because its easy to understand and at the same time its short. good job. the content is good and understandable.
The topic is well defined and although it lacks content it has a good finish.
It's good but the problem here is you suddenly switched to a different person. The topic was explained well and briefly.
nice work...
but i expect to read more solutions...
and like what rae g. said, it has a good finish... :D
it was explained briefly and it's precise, just add solutions...
This is a good topic, explaining some famous terrorist. But It has lack of content though. You just explain who are they. But also, good description of terrorism.
This work is very good, it's not boring. It's very interesting, once you read it, you will definitely want to finish it to the end. There are many facts and examples that made it interesting. The downside is, you lack solutions and elaborations, like solutions of the government to this terrorism.
"A common face of the new millennium is Osama Bin Laden’s His face has been associated with a rising global crisis"
you are having a run ons sentence.
you should have put a period before "his".
"Other incidents around the world are also being linked to terrorism."
- like what?
you are lacking of some attempted solutions by the government and your owm solutions.
The problem was well-defined but you haven't suggested any solutions at all...
You should have proposed solutions and state some issues about terrorism.
great job but i think you lack proposed solutions.
Martin,
This seems to be just a problem text. The assigned composition is a Problem-solution text. Have a middle ground paragraph where you discuss some solutions undertaken then have a final paragraph where you propose your own solution back it up with a course of action .... what you want your readers to do.
You should put more content into it. Your first paragraph was nice.You opened it with a very famous terrorist. It will surely catch anybody's attention.
please include the solutions for the problem. and the causes why this happened. expound your thoughts well.
For me it lacks content but you were able to define the nature of the problem nad it's effect very well. You should add solution to the problem.
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